The entire opening of the film is the same, with Rexy attacking the mercenaries who are retrieving the Indominus rex bone. We then cut to the news about Isla Nublar’s volcanic eruption and the DPG. I should also mention that in my version, Franklin Webb has been shafted from existence, and instead, we get Lowery. They see that the government won’t save the dinosaurs, and then there’s a conversation between Claire and Zia where the former explains why she’s so hellbent on saving them. She feels guilty about the 2015 incident (namely authorizing the creation of the Indominus and her seeing the dinosaurs as nothing but assets) and is doing everything she can to redeem herself. Claire gets the call from Ben Lockwood and that entire sequence is the same.
She then returns home, and we learn that Owen and Claire have gotten married. Claire explains to Owen their mission, and Owen reluctantly agrees to ensure her safety. He also learns that Blue is alive and decides to come along to save her.
So the DPG goes to the island. Wheatley is introduced when we see him capturing Rexy, so he’s automatically established as a badass. They talk a bit about how the T.rex is pretty much the most valuable dinosaur besides Blue because she’s the original Tyrannosaur from 1993. The scene with the Brachiosaurus is the same. Claire and Lowery go to the bunker to track Blue’s location while Owen and Zia go after her. Blue is tranquilized rather than getting shot, and Owen gets smacked in the back of the head by one of the mercenary’s guns, which knocks him out.
We then see Wheatley’s team capturing as many dinosaurs as possible, including carnivores like Allosaurus and Carnotaurus. One of the Allosaurs kills a guy when they’re trying to restrain it. The ground shakes from the eruption of Mount Sibo. Claire and Lowery use the ladder to get out of the bunker (the entire Baryonyx sequence is cut because I hate its design, Franklin’s screaming, and the behavior is just unrealistic). They find Owen, wake him up, and start fleeing the island. They take a Gyrosphere and instead of going to a cliff, they go to the dock, where they stop by crashing into a large rock formation. They see the dinosaurs being loaded onto the ship and sneak onboard. The death of the Brachiosaurus is the same.
The three find Zia, who is with Blue. We see more of her relationship with Owen as he tries to calm her down, and Maisie is watching the Velociraptor videos. There’s also more talking between Owen and Claire. They talk about how Blue is like Owen’s daughter and consider having a child when everything’s over.
Maisie discovers that the dinosaurs are going to be sold, tells her father, finds the Indoraptor, gets caught by Mills, and gets locked in her room. The boat arrives at the mansion, the dinosaurs are prepared to be sold, and Claire and Owen get caught. Lockwood confronts Mills, who, instead of suffocating him with a pillow, kills him with some physical hits. Maisie finds Lockwood’s body and takes his book. When she’s hiding, she realizes she’s a clone.
In the prison, Owen and Claire talk more about the latter’s guilt about how she treated the dinosaurs. They use Stiggy to escape and meet Maisie, who tells them she’s a clone. Claire and Owen use Stiggy to crash the auction when the Indoraptor is revealed. Several people are thrown into the bars of the cage, and Stiggy rams into it in her rampage, which weakens it. The Indoraptor is able to pull the bars open with his grasping hands and briefly fights Stiggy, easily defeating and killing her by pushing his sickle claw into her jugular vein. He kills Wheatley and Eversol as Claire, Owen, and Maisie run into Mills. They already know Maisie is a clone, so that argument gets shafted.
The entire Indoraptor chase throughout the mansion is the same. Zia and Blue are released (with Lowery instead of Franklin), and the humans get cornered on the roof. Everything is the same until the humans are debating what to do with the dinosaurs. Claire and Owen have a brief argument, where Owen says she can redeem herself for the 2015 incident by letting them die. She chooses not to release them, but they break down the door. A Carnotaurus kills Mills on its way out, and Rexy destroys the Indominus DNA sample under her foot. Blue leaves Owen and Ian Malcolm talks about how humans will have to coexist with dinosaurs and it could potentially spell their doom.
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I really like your rewrite. Only thing I would have done differently is not have Maisie be a clone. Other than that, this was a good read.
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Would’ve made a few different changes but overall a good rewrite.
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Really good, since it's a short rewrite the tone thing isn't changed, but other than that it's really good, much better than the actual movie. My main gripe is that you didn't confirm that the Indoraptor DOESN'T smile into the camera...... but if he kills Wheatley AFTER he breaks out, THEN THE SMILE SCENE PROBABLY DIDN'T HAPPEN!!!! THANK YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!! As Ultrazero mentioned, I would have personally taken out that clone thing, but to each their own. Poor Styggi..... Really great rewrite, would have paid to have seen this in theaters! YAY LOWERY!!!!!!!
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